2010年4月20日火曜日

Essays 1-01b

Dear host family

Hello! My name is Chika. Nice to meet you. I am nineteen years old. I live in Kumamoto in Japan. Kumamoto is very warm, full of natural beauty, and famous for Kumamoto castle, Mt. Aso.


Now, I am a sophomore at KGU. I am majoring in English. I want to be a flight attendant. So I have to improve my English skills. Especially, I want to speak English fluently, so please teach me.


By the way, I love to sing. Although it is a lot of work to memorize all the latest hits, I go to karaoke with my friends once a month and sing out my heart. I also like to go to see a movie. My favorite movie is“ Harry Potter ”series, because it gives me a thrill. I am addicted to“ HEROES”. It also gives me a thrill. When I was young, I watched “Full House”. I like to play badminton, so I want to play it together. I am talkative, but I get all nervous, and can’t say a word of what I want to say when I am with a nice looking guy.


Let me introduce to you my family. At first impression, my father seems a little stern, but he is a real family man. He gives us a birthday present every year. My mother is so kind and caring. My older brother is a cook at hotel new Otani. I love my family.


Finally, I have never been abroad, so I am a little anxious about foreign life, but I am excited about going to a foreign country. I am interested in foreign foods, life style, and a row of houses along the street, clothes, music, event, climate, and manner and so on. Please tell me about everything! I am looking forward to seeing you. Have a nice day!
Love, Chika

Ayaka さんのコメント...
Hi, Chika!
I love karaoke too! Next time go to together!
Where do you want to go foreign country?
I want to go England!

2010年4月14日10:02
Asuka さんのコメント...
What song do you like best?

Nami さんのコメント...
Hi, Chika!
I like to go to karaoke and see a movie too!
I want to go to hotel new Otani(^ω^)
Who is like the best musician

revisions
*I want to go France,Italy,and Netherlands.

*I have many favorite songs,so I can't decide,but it may be an improper expression,O'ver sung by EXILE.

*I like EXILE the best,because they have a lot of good songs,talent for singing.Especially,ATSUSHI(Vo.)has nice voice,but I like TAKAHIRO(Vo.).
Originally,I love SHUN(Vo.).He is vocal of EXILE before.He often wore his hat.In addition, I also like Ayumi Hamasaki, AAA, Kumi Koda...etc...
(420words)

1 件のコメント:

  1. Hi Chika,

    Would you please work extra information that you wrote and added to the end of this post into existing or new paragraphs in the body of this essay?

    This revised essay (Essay 1-01b) also should include the mind map graphic that you put in a separate post. Once you've added that to this post, please add one at least one more label, "graphics" (plural, without quotation marks).

    Cheers, PB

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